Movie Monday: The Ordinary World

 

There are a variety of plot structures to choose from when writing a story, but by far the most famous and prevalent is the Hero’s Journey. You can find echoes of it in every story ever told.

Star Wars is the most famous example, and as much of a fan as I am, there’s enough out there on how it matches line for line. So instead, I’m going to focus on a different aspect of the hero’s journey every week and match it to the relevant scene in a movie.

Why movies not books?

Well for starters, unless I want to go with the classical cannon, there’s a much better chance of everyone having seen the same movie than reading the same book. There’s also a better chance of someone remembering a specific scene from said movie or book. And because movies are so much more compact, the elements of the story are very specific and easy to point to, whereas in a book it may be much more subtle and may unfold over much more time.

Part one of the hero’s journey is establishing the ordinary world. In other plot structure’s you’ll see this called “slice of life.” Cartoons tend to do this very well with voiceovers (Hiccup’s “This is Berk” narrative, the Crood’s mini-cartoon at the beginning, Welcome to Riley’s Brain in Inside Out), songs (Rapunzel’s tower song, Belle’s “Bonjour,” or “This is my idea” from Swan Princess), and montages (Big Hero Six, UP, and Monster’s INC).

The BEST example I can think of for establishing the ordinary world is “Wreck it Ralph.” In this scene, Ralph gives a voice over that serves a function in the narrative instead of just being an info dump. His narrative establishes his conflict, establishes the rules of the world, his role within it and the theme of accepting himself for who he is (I’m bad, and that’s good…) But what makes this moment the best example is everything that happens in the background. Sonic establishes the limits of the world, Surge Protector establishes his bias against “bad guys,” the bus moving through the power cables establishes how they can hop from one game to another, there’s even a reference to Turbo. A million things are established in the one scene, but it does not begin the journey. It establishes the slice of life.

What are some of your favorite slice of life moments?

And the winner is…Ares!

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Enjoy an exclusive, never before seen scene featuring, Ares followed by a live Q&A. Got any questions for the God of War? Post them below. You can also tweet or FB.


 

Ares. Gritting my teeth, I tossed my hair back and unlocked the door. Fiery eyes greeted me, igniting months of pent-up anger toward my . . . what? Ex? Did our brief fling last summer even qualify as a relationship? Hell if I knew.

“Aphrodite.” He stepped forward, the motion seeming almost unintentional as his eyes drank me in. When he came up against my shield, he frowned.

My hand itched to slam the door in his face. Instead, I called up my most dazzling grin, dropped the shield, and threw myself into his arms. “Ares!” I made myself laugh—as if he hadn’t broken my heart—when he picked me up and spun me around. “I haven’t seen you in—”

The word forever caught in my throat. Gods can’t lie. Like, it’s physically impossible. But human sayings have a tendency to get stuck in my head. “Thirteen months.”

“You counted?” A cocky grin lit up his face as he set me down and crossed over the threshold. “Got you something.” He drew a long, thin brown paper bag from his coat and handed it to me.

I withdrew the picture book inside, smiling when I saw the cover. It was a children’s book on mythology. Flipping through the pages, I saw tiny envelopes begging to be opened, three dimensional cut-outs, and a hodgepodge of items fastened to the pages like a scrapbook. As a new goddess, some of the nuances of humanity eluded me. Reading their take on our history, particularly how they framed myths for their children, gave me some insight. It was amazing how much humans got wrong.

I flipped to a page that showed a young girl reaching down to pluck a flower from the edge of the riverbed, seemingly unaware of the frost creeping up the petals. The heading proclaimed the myth of Boreas and Orethyia to be the origin of winter. I turned to another section and my gaze landed on an illustration of Eris, the Goddess of Discord, holding a golden apple between Hera, Athena, and Artemis. I frowned, reading the section title. “The Divine Beauty Contest.”

Ares glanced over my shoulder, his breath familiar against my neck. “If you’d been around back then, you would have won that. Hands down.”

Whatever Ares saw on my face made his grin falter. He backed away. “I would have called, or come by, or something after—” He shoved his hands into the pockets of his leather jacket. “I’m sorry. I was stuck in a jar. It’s a long story, and we’re already running late.”

Late? My insides went cold, and I set the book down on the kitchen countertop. “She told you.” Persephone might be a powerful patron, but I’d worried more than once that her naiveté would be my downfall.

“Poseidon got a lead on the missing demigods, so he pulled her into a meeting to talk strategy. Nothing they think I’d be any help with.” He smirked, stepping into my small living room, dark eyes flitting over the slim furnishings. No one took Ares seriously, and he liked it that way. “Hades stepped out long enough to ask me to collect you.” A flicker of concern lit up his eyes as he looked me over. “And I can sense that you have enough power to dreamwalk. So why did he send me?”

Dreamwalking didn’t take much power. But the ability to stay asleep long enough to slip into a dreamscape helped. Persephone understood why peaceful sleeping was an issue for me, so we’d arranged to meet early. If I couldn’t show, she’d ’port in to physically pull me into the dreamscape.

“Believe me, I’m asking myself the same question.” I moved backward until I bumped against the couch. Sitting down, I crossed my legs and studied Ares.

His gaze lingered on my legs for a split second before he caught himself and met my eyes. “Have the nightmares gotten that bad?”

You don’t get to ask about my nightmares. I flashed my teeth at him. After Zeus died, Ares, Adonis, Hephaestus, and I took off on a celebratory road trip, thinking Zeus would never trouble us again. Right up until I’d woken up screaming. “You’re really not going to elaborate on how you managed to get stuck in a jar for over a year? Seriously?”

“No, I’m really not.” His hands stayed in the pockets of his jacket as he leaned against the wall opposite me, putting as much space between us as the small room would physically allow. “Look, I get it. I’m the last person you want to talk to about this, but you need real help, Aphrodite. If this is the full extent of Persephone’s solution, I mean, it’s cute, but—”

“Cute?” I held up my hand. “Let me stop you right there. Our queen is not ‘cute,’ she’s—”

Ares rolled his eyes. “That whole queen thing was never made official.”

“We swore over our powers! How much more ‘official’ does it get?”

“She gave them back after she killed Zeus.”

Not mine. When Zeus created me, he’d thrown in an extra special quirk, making me obedient to anyone in his bloodline who outranked me. Only Persephone outranked me now. But refusing to break the vow of fealty that gave Persephone control of my powers made obedience my choice rather than his. Ares might see the distinction as meaningless; after all, I was hers to command either way. But some days, the subtle distinctions between Zeus’s choices and mine were all that kept me sane.

“She’s strong.” Ares held out his hands in appeasement. “I’m not contesting that.”

I rolled my eyes and picked up my phone, making a show of looking at the time while he talked.

“But strength doesn’t trump knowledge. I’ve been around a lot longer. I know a thing or two about—”

“And we’re officially late.” I tossed the phone toward him before he could elaborate. He didn’t know anything about what I’d been through. If he did, that night would have ended a lot differently.

Ares caught the phone by reflex. “You can’t afford to be seen as weak.”

My nails bit into the palms of my hands. “I know.”

“I don’t think you do.” He crossed the living room, pausing to set my phone down on the arm of my couch. “You bound yourself to Persephone. On one level, her claim to you may help, because no one is going to touch you unless they want to deal with her. But if they do want to get to her or send a message, then you’re a good way to do it.”

“I knew the risks when I swore to her.”

“Did you? Because you made a statement that you didn’t have to. You chose a side—”

“There are no sides anymore.” Zeus’s death might have set me free, but the circumstances of his demise created a major power vacuum and completely upset the hierarchy of gods, who were long accustomed to picking sides and petty squabbles anytime they got together. Right now, everyone had fallen into an uneasy truce. I knew Ares didn’t expect it to last long, but I had hope. This was a new Pantheon. There weren’t as many of us left, and our issues were a bit more meaningful than beauty contests and scandalous gossip.

“In this moment, yes. But peace never lasts. Persephone might slip up or Poseidon could go off the rails—hell, he’s halfway there already. But something is going to happen and we’re going to be at each other’s throats again. We all know it. Why do you think we all spent the last few thousand years in our separate corners, ignoring one another?”

“To make it easier for Zeus to pick you off?” I suggested, studying the half-moon indentions my nails left in my palms. Zeus had been systematically killing off his offspring and absorbing their powers, unbeknownst to the Pantheon. That was, until he abducted Demeter’s daughter and Poseidon’s son. Going after the children of realm-rulers was too great an offense to ignore, so the Pantheon came together and fought Zeus in a bitter battle, heavy with loss.

“You made a statement, Aphrodite. But the only advantage you’ve got to back it up is charm. That’s not always going to be enough.”

I could do shields, healing, glamours, and all the standard stuff as well, but most of the gods that were left had received something extra from both of their parents. I only had one—Zeus. “You mean the charm I used to completely incapacitate you?” I snorted. “I’d say it’s enough.”

Charm, or charisma, is like mind control. If used correctly, I can look any human, and most gods, in the eyes and make them do whatever I want. Lucky me, since gods need worship to survive. Since I’d only been created a couple of years ago, I didn’t exactly have a cult following to support my existence.

Ares shifted, visibly uncomfortable at the reminder. “I’m not one of the gods you should be worried about.”

I frowned, trying to figure out who he thought I should worry about. Athena, probably, though she’d always been friendly enough to me. Poseidon maybe? Only an idiot would let their guard down around him. Still, I considered everyone else in the Pantheon to be a friend.

“Let me help you.” Ares stepped forward, closing the space between us.

I narrowed my eyes. “What I need, you can’t give me.”

Ares gritted his teeth. “Fine. But for now, we need a convincing reason to explain why we’re late, not to mention why we’re showing up together.”

He had a point. The other gods wouldn’t actually ask, but I didn’t want to start the rumor mill churning with the idea that either Ares or I were too weak to dreamwalk without assistance.

“Okay, so it’s the middle of the day in Bangkok.” Ares’s face screwed up in thought. “If we ’port into a traffic jam there, then we could say that we got caught—”

“How did you even survive before me?” I slid my arms around him, shivering when my skin came into contact with his cold jacket.

“Oh.” Ares said, catching on. He lowered his mouth to mine. “Yeah, that’ll work, too.”

His lips burned against mine, warm and eager. Familiar. The kiss deepened, then multiplied. Ten kisses as short as one, one as long as twenty, and the entire universe dissolved into Ares’s touch. For one precious second, I felt like more than a tool. More than Zeus’s abomination willed to life. Someone, not something.

But his kisses were lies. And they hurt more than any truth I’d ever faced. Memories sprang to my mind unbidden. The whisper of fabric, a gentle caress, his lips against mine. What you’re looking for, he’d whispered, I can’t give you.

My back hit the couch, pinning his arm beneath me.

“Are you ready?” he asked, breaking away.

“Yeah,” I whispered, my voice hoarse with what? Pain? Wanting? Whatever this feeling was, I didn’t like it. Or maybe I liked it too much.

Ares pressed two fingers to my forehead and pushed me into the dreamscape.

 

Pick Your Valentine!

As usual, Aphrodite has plenty to choose from. Check out these simply divine profiles and vote on your favorite.  Whoever is leading in the polls at 5:00 PM EST has a date with you, dear reader by way of an all new scene featuring that character and a live Q&A.

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A rebellious demigod who knows just how far to push the rules until they break. Tantalus Atreus is the gods gift to woman kind, so why not partake?

Name: Tantalus Atreus

S/N: @Tantalizeme

Age: I’m not picky.

Location: A little slice of paradise

Seeking: A good time

Stats: Average height, aurum (gold hair, eyes, skin and more ;), well built

What my ideal partner would be like: Fun. Flexible. Doesn’t get clingy.

 My idea of a perfect date: I’m always down for a party. The more the merrier.

 Best Feature: Charming.

 Biggest Turn off: Holier than thou types

 Interests: Games, politics, music

 Profession: Model

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Are you looking for a supernatural Christian Grey who can keep you entertained all night long? Then is Poseidon the god for you!

Name: Poseidon

S/N: @Oceaneyes

Age: As old as the sea

Location: Somewhere beyond the sea

Seeking: Men, women, nymphs, species of the equine persuasion.

Stats:  Tall, blond, built like a god. What more could you want?

What my ideal partner would be like: Blonde, green eyed, petite equestrians.Would prefer an environmentalist. Someone who really cares about the earth.

 My idea of a perfect date: Long walks on the beach.

 Best Feature: Powerful

 Biggest Turn off: That would be hard to manage.

 Interests: Marine biology, surfing, water bending, horses

 Profession: Let’s just  go with upper management.

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Enjoy heated debates? Adonis has a strong sense of justice and an opinion about everything!

Name: Adonis Eros

S/N: @SocialJusticeWarrior29

Age: 19

Location: Miami, Florida

Seeking: Nothing. I just got out of a serious relationship.

Stats: Aurum, average height, average build.

 What my ideal partner would be like: Socially aware, outspoken, activist. I like a girl who speaks her mind and means what she says with no equivocation. Must have brain.

 My idea of a perfect date: Dinner and a movie

 Best Feature: I give a damn.

 Biggest Turn off: God-complexes.

 Interests: News, politics, the world around me. #staywoke

 Profession: Model

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Still waters run deep in this surprising pacifist.

Name: Ares

S/N: @CryHavoc

Age: …is just a number

Location: Right in the thick of things

Seeking: Love

 Stats:  Tall, black hair, fiery eyes, built like a god. Likes leather.

 What my ideal partner would be like: Her.

 My idea of a perfect date: Dancing in the rain. Don’t knock it until you try it.

 Best Feature: I’m a great listener.

 Biggest Turn off: Jars.Don’t ask.

 Interests: Camping in the great outdoors. Adventure. Road trips. Fun.

 Profession: Soldier

Vote for your favorite!

A Valentine from the Goddess of Love

Starting today, you can preorder Aphrodite! Here’s the link! Stick around for some bonus content and Valentine Fun!

Happy Valentine’s Weekend!

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I know Valentine’s isn’t until Sunday, but today is the last school day before Valentine’s day, which makes it almost important. Enjoy the cards, the candy, and the love. Make someone’s day special and take the time to give yourself the same courtesy.

Enjoy the weekend!

Writing on Wednesday: Make Out Scenes

Writing make out scenes is hard from me. I’m from the Bible belt, there’s guilt. When my characters start doing more than kissing, I type like…not my grandmother is watching me. But someone else’s, just to make it more awkward. Some sweet, old lady who doesn’t know me at all and is silently judging how badly I’m going to corrupt her grandchild.

 

Suffice to say, it’s awkward. My screen always fades to black. One day I may get over that, but it won’t be soon.

This  came up in my writers group last week and either I’m not alone and every other writer is just as embarrassed, or every other writer pretends to be because to say otherwise implies you were…into it.

Do male authors have this problem?

Anyway, I don’t know if every other author does it this way, but here’s my process.

Pre-Planning–

I Google “greatest kiss scenes” and read the scenes readers are raving about. Cassandra Clare comes up a lot. There’s tons of movie scenes, book scenes, scenes from tv shows, even comic strips that pop up under that search that tons of people have commented on. I find a few that match the general tone I want to set and then analyze them for what would work in my scenario and what wouldn’t.

To do this I break the scene down into the following categories.

Mechanics. Where are they? What things are around them? Who is moving where? What are their hands up to? When do they kiss? Where do they kiss?

Emotions. How do the emotions play into the scene?

Descriptions. Any awesome turns of phrase? How can I create, not that exact phrase, but the image it evokes in my own words?

Comments. What are people saying about that scene? I’m generally looking for the phrase “I love the way…” The things people notice are amazing. One of my favorite observations from a kissing scene is this one:

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This tends to be where I notice characterization of the actual mechanics.

Of course while I’m going over those other scenes, I’m making notes. My characters aren’t here, they’re there. No, they don’t feel like this, they feel like that. How would I show this? She’d never do that adorable little hop thing, but she might do this. And before you know it, my notes are starting to resemble a scene.

I have to break it down into the craft. Otherwise, I die of embarrassment. Which is ridiculous, I know, but whatever. It works for me. I think. I hope.

Anyway, hope you enjoyed the laugh. Let me leave you with a kissing scene from my WIP, Blood and Other Matter.

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I felt myself leaning toward her. Lips so close to hers that the space between us felt like something physical and charged. Like I was holding my hand over a flame. My body buzzed with anticipation. Her breath blended with mine and I realized she was leaning forward too, and the only thing between us was hesitation.
It was one thing to admit we loved one another, we’d always known that. Our feelings for one another may have evolved, shifted contexts, but they were so cloaked in the familiar that there was a comfort to them. This was different. There would be no going back from this. Ridiculously nervous, I cleared my throat. “Can I—“
“Please,” she breathed and we moved together, lips skirting the border of touching and not. This is what had been missing before. Sweetness and fear. In one breath we’d stepped off out safe and familiar cliff and plunged into unknown. But the fall was exhilarating.
The sound of the surf crashing against the sand pulsed through us, creating a rhythm that we fell into. Fear melted into confidence, sweetness into wanting. Almost eighteen years of history led to this moment and it was perfect. Pulling her to me with a level of suave I didn’t know I possessed, I dipped her in my arms, kissing her so deeply I couldn’t tell who was breathing for who. We kissed so long, my lips felt raw but I couldn’t imagine ever stopping. The world narrowed down to my lips against hers, her body against mine, and everything that we were, everything that we’d been through, everything that we felt and feared and hoped for.
Her breathing went ragged and I pulled away, thinking maybe this was moving faster than she’d wanted, but her hands gripped the front of my shirt and yanked me back to her.
“Tess,” I managed, mouth drawn back to hers despite myself. The angle was killing my neck but I barely noticed because her hands were moving under my shirt and I didn’t have the slightest clue what to do with mine. Fortunately, they went solo, acting of their own accord and ran down her slender frame, pulling, lifting her against me.
“Lava,” she gasped. “We’re, uh,” she kissed me again, fingers tangling in my hair. “Standing in lava and stuff.”
“No, I—“ My phone buzzed and I shoved my hand into my pocket to silence it with an impatient click. “I know it’s you.” I’d memorized her kiss, the way she moved against me, her every breath. It was so different than before, so Tess, that I knew I could never be fooled again. Anyone else, anything else, would be a pale imitation. “You don’t have to—I mean, we don’t have to—I’m okay with just—“
I felt her smile and pretty quickly determined that if I could make that happen every day for the rest of my life I’d die happy. “You’re getting ahead of yourself,” she pointed out.
“Well…yeah.”
“I like this.” She kissed me for emphasis. “Let’s see where this goes.”
She didn’t have to tell me twice.

 

 

 

For Real Friday: #wheresrey

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So my brother and I recently got into a weeks long text dispute over whether or not the Where’s Rey hash tag was something worth being offended about.

His take: No. There are tons of Rey toys, he bought my daughter one for Christmas. They aren’t hard to find, with right before Christmas being an exception because they were sold out. Not including her in the group sets creates a market scarcity, and how awesome of a money making strategy was it that Hasbro now has two sets of Star Wars monopoly? Plus they were trying to avoid spoilers. It created an air of mystery about the character. Women should be more focused on big, actual issues not whining about this unimportant stuff. Especially when the biggest movie of the year just had a super strong, capable, amazing female protagonist.

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My take: What spoilers? Every toy but two shows Rey with the staff she had in the preview. There was no reason to delay launch based on what I’ve seen of these toys. The protagonist of the story should be (and in literally every other movie is) in every set with three or more characters unless said set is specifically “Droids” or “Sidekicks” or some other weird category. The protagonist has never before been an add on character you can only buy separate. Particularly when that protagonist is an underrepresented facet of society.

Look, I like princesses as much as the next person. Better, probably. But it sends a message that a girl can be an awesome pilot of a certain space ship and be left out of that set. That a girl can be a great fighter, but not show up alongside her opponent in boxed sets. That a girl can be the protagonist of the entire story and not be included in the games and major merchandise for the movie she starred in. You don’t create market scarcity with the protagonist. You do it with the adorable robot or a random sidekick. You take a not as valued character, like say Sailor Mercury or the ugly beanie babies and make that character 10,000 times more valued by making her harder to find.

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As for worrying about real issues, the toy aisle is a real issue. Representation matters. The fact that the toy aisle is moving backward matters. Maybe not as much as rape or the big issues surrounding feminism, but that argument is a slippery slope. There’s always a bigger issue more worthy of getting upset over. That doesn’t mean the small stuff doesn’t matter or doesn’t contribute to those bigger issues. Especially when you’re talking about messages being sent to small children. They internalize those messages as they grow, and they don’t stop coming.

Girls do not exist in traditional “boy toys” like star wars sets, or they are very, very rare. You can’t find Black Widow in the “complete avengers set.” In the toy aisle, boys can pretend girls don’t exist at all. Incidentally, this doesn’t happen to the same degree in the girl toy aisle. There’s a prince for every princess.

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“Boy” shows that too many girls like disappear and are pulled off the air. But if boys like a girls show, its a smash hit. In fact, if you look at the marketing for the most recent princess movies, you’ll find the previews “designed to appeal to boys” did so by creating a complete absence of girls. Remember that weird Olaf/Sven commercial? That whole thing where the names of the movies are no longer the names of the protagonists? That was thought up to create a crossover audience. Movies are headed in the right direction, but marketing is moving backward.

As boys grow, this absence continues in the classroom, where boys out talk girls and girls who speak as third as often as they do are labeled as chatty and distracting and accused of talking more than anyone else in the classroom.  There’s a reason girls preface questions or comments in lecture like settings with “I’m sorry.” They are taught to from a very early age. It continues movies where the absence of girls has become so commonplace that people literally interpret a crowd of 17 women, 83 men as having an equal number of men and women. At 33 women to 67 men, women are seen as outnumbering the men. There’s a reason girls try to take up as little space as possible in public settings (though I maintain it’s just good manners not to sprawl out and take up as much space as possible, there IS a reason it’s a gendered phenomenon).

And let’s not even go into the absence of female historical figures despite their actual prevalence in history. Or of female authors. Or how anything that girls like en-masse is criticized and belittled into non-existence (think of all the criticism princess movies get compared to their super hero counterparts?).

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We KNOW girls are absorbing all these subconscious messages. There have been countless studies to prove just how huge of an impact that socialized silence, and manners, and mannerisms have in every aspect of our lives.

But what impact is it having on boys? What does it mean that when they hear girls talk it’s instantly interpreted as taking over the conversation? What does it mean that when they see a crowd with 30% women they see themselves as outnumbered? What does it mean that from an incredibly early age on the toy aisle, they are trained to expect girls to vanish from their own stories so they don’t have to deal with having a female action figure spoiling their set. What message does it send that when they go with their sisters down the pink aisle they see space carved out for them their but the opposite isn’t true. What message does it send that when a little girl dresses up as batman she’s praised for breaking boundaries but little boys are shamed for dressing as princesses? That all their lives they hear girls stories, toys, movies, books, whatever thing is being geared toward girls trashed while their own play escapes the same scrutiny. That the worst thing you can imply about a boy is that he’s girly and in the inevitable romantic subplot of “boy” books and movies one of the go to lines is that “she’s not like other girls.”

It starts on the toy aisle.

The toy companies are fixing the Rey thing because of a hash tag. Or maybe my brother’s right, and the whole thing was a marketing tactic designed to get everyone offended and taking about the lack of toys so the second they made them, they’d be snatched off the shelf. Either way, leaving her out was damaging.

Representation matters. Because when people aren’t represented, they disappear. Even when they’re standing front and center in the spotlight. Amazing how that works.

Writing on Wednesday: James Dasher

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A few weeks (months? I don’t know, time has been flying lately) ago, James Dashner came to Athens to talk about his new series and answer questions from the audience. I brought my six year old because I’m a terrible evil person and had no sitter. Thankfully, she was very good and did all her talking before James Dashner started his Q&A.

To James Dashner.

It was adorable. She told him that she’s a writer and that her recent project, “The Little Red Hen, only in this version the Hen is a cat,” is a whole ten pages long. “How long is YOUR book?”

Oh, 300 or so pages.

Utter shock from my child.

He was very nice to her and to me. He signed my writing advice book before the actual signing started, breaking the rules to do so (thank you random person for lending me your pen).

His advice?

“Write Every Day. Keep attending conferences. And do your best not to suck! :)”

I learned that he grew up in Georgia, so he comes back this way a lot. He’s a pantser, not a plotter but for his new series he actually outlined everything ahead of time. My approach tends to be write a draft then outline it, then revise. So I understand the struggle. I can’t outline too much before I write because when the story inevitably takes me off outline, I break.

Once the Q&A started, most of the questions had to do with some basics of writing, differences between the movie and the book, and is there any hope a certain character who died in the book will live through the movie. Dashner answered each question well and with a bit of an air of disbelief that his books and characters are so popular.

During the Q&A I didn’t ask any questions because here’s the thing. He’s a YA writer. I know a ton of adults read YA, I’m one of them. But when it comes to author appearances, I think the grown ups should take a step back in deference to the target audience. These are kids who are super into his books and talking to a role model. Kids who are actively being inspired to read and write. And that’s a pretty cool thing to watch all on its own.

Though my daughter did have a question, I had her wait until it was over and she asked him as we were walking out the door.

“Mr. Dashner, did you like the lion king?”

Why, yes he did.

 

Movie Monday: Interstellar

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Let’s talk about plot holes.

A plot hole is when there is a glaringly obvious hole in your story telling that should have ended your story or altered the outcome of the plot. It is not something you wish the main character had done differently. It is not events that you wish would have played out a different way. A plot hole is when the willing suspension of disbelief snaps because the author hasn’t paid enough attention to their own details.

Take Interstellar for example. It’s a good movie. It must be a good movie, because I watched it days ago and I’m still furious. A good story is one that gets a reaction out of the people experiencing it. I connected to the plot and cared deeply about the outcome. But good or not, there are some glaring and unavoidable plot holes.

Interstellar features a dying earth gasping its last breath. A blight that thrives on nitrogen has been killing off all the plant life on earth. People are starving. With every infected plant type, the blight gets stronger because the lack of plants = less oxygen in our already nitrogen rich air.

The movie spends a lot of time establishing earth and making you care about one family scrounging their way by on their farm. The family features an adorable, brilliant little girl, an obedient, happy son, a sentimental grandfather, and an unhappy dad. He doesn’t want to be a farmer, he was a great pilot once.

So stuff happens and pilot ends up getting hired by NASA to take a space ship through a wormhole into another galaxy in search of a new earth. There’s other people, but plot wise no one matters quite as much as the father and daughter. Dad chooses to leave his family behind on a dying planet for an untold number of years in hopes of saving them one day. This is a point of contention for me. I’m sad he left his family. I think he should have negotiated that they go into cryosleep (that’s a thing in this story) on the ship where they could be awoken either when they find a nice planet or when they return home unsuccessful. It’s a thing that makes me angry. It is not however a plot hole.

A plot hole is a society in the future having less capabilities but more technology then we do now when it comes to exploring new planets. A decade ago, NASA sent twelve scientists to explore potential planets and see if they were habitable. They indicated they sent probes prior to the people (which in terms of the time planet makes no sense because they shouldn’t have gotten results yet, but whatever).  They chose people instead of their super advanced robots who could communicate because humans can improvise. Okay. Sure. I mean, sending the robots first and THEN people would make more sense,but there’s some bigger issues here.

Let’s look at some of the planets. Planet 1. A water planet where time is warped due to its proximity to a black hole. The scientist has been sending back good readings. Lots of them. But when they get there they discover she’s dead because it’s a water planet (giant waves, no apparent land) and the same signal just sent over and over again because of time and stuff. But by their own math, the lady was only down there for an hour and a half. So shouldn’t they have been wondering why they had a decades worth of messages from her? Also, why land there at all? The woman, who is a scientist for NASA would have only needed to make an orbit around the planet to note that there’s no apparent land and massive waves that will kill you dead. Those are the sorts of things you can see in space. Sort of like how we’ve never been on Jupiter but we know there’s a giant storm there?

Next planet. Frozen tundra with frozen clouds and ammonia for air. We can tell what planets are made of just by looking at them. It’s called spectrography. We’ve had the ability to do that since the 1800’s. No need to send a scientist there.

A character drives through a black hole instead of being crushed into a singularity. Plan B for humanity is a billion frozen fertilized eggs and they sent only one woman on the mission. I actually feel like I missed an explanation there, so if I did please enlighten me. A character causes a major paradox in the time space continuum that really shouldn’t be possible, but that one I’d be willing to suspend belief for if the other plot holes weren’t so maddening.

Like why not have three technically habitable planets with some other massive issue a probe couldn’t pick up? Like maybe other forms of monstrous life? There was so much more that could be done. And again, why go to the planet that cost the main character so much precious time away from his super cute daughter when you can SEE it isn’t habitable and even if there’s some reason they can’t see that (maybe black holes interfere with vision) maybe give your scientist already on the planet more than an day on the surface to investigate? Every hour that passes there = 7 years on earth. So…maybe go to that one last if none of the others work out because really, what were they hoping to discover? It was so important to retrieve the scientists data but they literally forgot she wouldn’t have had time to gather it (she was sent ten years ago, it takes two years to get there).

 

Another major plot hole is a big spoiler.

 

 

Big Spoiler!!!!

 

Okay so if the professor solving the math problem knew that there was no hope for the people on earth,  shouldn’t they have sent more people with each mission?  I mean, in the interest of potentially getting more people off earth and into space? Just seems like a thing that should have been considered. Use those ships to their max. Also, I get not telling everyone and spreading panic, but he broke up a family. Sorry, no. You don’t get to decide, “the human race is gonna die unless we send these eggs to a habitable planet. So this guy doesn’t get to die with his kids. He’s going to think he’s coming back, but not really.” No. Saving all the people on earth is a noble goal. Creating new people on another planet, not so much. Humans don’t deserve to continue on just by virtue of being human. The people alive matter more than the people who would have never existed if plan A had any chance of succeeding. Don’t lie and tell this guy he’s saving his kids when he’s really leaving them to die. And as a parent, don’t fricken leave your kids on a dying planet! Like, best case scenario, you find a habitable planet. Your kids are breathing in more and more dust and life sucks at home, but yay, you saved them. What’s to say NASA doesn’t have a list of who can fit on that space station? I mean, from what I can tell, literally every other country on the planet ceased to exist, so what happens if the one percent decides there’s more resources if the farmers stay home? They don’t know the planet is dying anyway. You have no assurances your family is going to be rescued once they leave your sight. Take care of your fricken kids.

Grr! Okay, last half of that paragraph not a plot hole, just a plot preference, but it really bothered me!

Anyway, plot holes are infuriating and you should try to avoid them in your work because they take readers out of the story.

For Real Friday: Barbie

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Yesterday (or possibly before, I’ve been hiding under a rock called DEADLINE), Mattel announce new line of Barbies with a wider array of skin tones and body shapes, and the results were mixed. Most reactions I saw among the mommy sphere were positive. But the rest were mixed between

“OMG! Why don’t we give our children more credit. THEY KNOW THEY’RE TOYS. If your kid is looking at a doll and saying ‘I should look like this’ you have a problem.”

And

“Why is there an obese Barbie? Mattel shouldn’t be encouraging obesity!”

Which basically proves negative reaction one is a load of crap. Because if THAT many adults look at a doll with healthy proportions and sees not just fat, but obesity, there is in fact a problem with their perception. So no, actually, we can’t count on our kids not to have an unrealistic outlook on body perception if grown ups are that confused.

The curvy Barbie isn’t obese. Do you really think that after decades of criticism for creating a doll with anatomically impossible proportions, they didn’t bother to research what healthy ratios on different body types? Seriously?

Mattel isn’t the only company with this problem. Over the past few years several dolls with realistic proportions (note, realistic in this context means possible, not a reflection on America’s growing obesity problem) and healthy proportions, like the Lammily Doll and the Tree Change Doll, were also instantly labeled fat.

I’m not saying the issues with perception should be laid at Barbie’s feet. Girls are inundated with images of super skinny, often to the point of being unhealthy, people their entire lives, and research shows it has an impact. That’s why France is making sure their models are at least not unhealthy. (They are also getting cries of criticism for promoting obesity).

Since when does not skinny to the point of being unhealthy = obese?

For women? Since always.

As a kindergartener, I remember being distinctly proud that I weighed less than anyone else in my class. When my pediatrician says my daughter is underweight, my FIRST reaction is to think, “Oh, good.” AND THEN I come to my senses and start asking about how that might impact her health.

Talk to any group of women, and you’ll find reactions like mine.

mjaxmy0xowuxmwq4ndizngm0nwvm_51802aa4ba6caAs for promoting obesity by showing realistic body types, some research indicates that the prevalence of unachievable/unhealthy slimness in the imagery we’re constantly exposed to is actually a contributing factor to obesity. That’s why memes like this have so much resonance.

A girl may be a completely healthy weight for her body type and height and still think she’s fat. So when she gains a few pounds and crosses the line from healthy to overweight, to her it’s not a matter of losing five or six pounds to get back to a healthy goal. In her head it’s already twenty-plus. They get caught in this cycle of hopelessness that may have just as much to do with obesity as the prevalence of fast food places.

Perception matters. And if this week has proven anything, it’s that ours if vastly skewed.